Getting A Puppy's
The Begging
Its that time of day when your parents come home from work. A thought comes to you mind so fast you do not even have time to ask how their day was "Can we get a puppy"? You have asked this question over a hundred but you always get the same answer. "maybe when you older" or "we do not have enough time" or a just a plain NO. So you keep trying day after day.
You continue to try and try to be the most responsible you can with why you deserve this puppy that you want more then ANYTHING in this world. But your parents seem to come up with a different excuse everyday like they DROOL to much, or they SHED to much, or maybe even they will TARE the couch. You have all the reason to give up but you don't.
The most amazing day
Time passed and you ask again and instead of your parents saying no as they usually though they say maybe. Then a bit later they call you over and.......there it is the dog you have been wanting for all this time! Its eyes are as big as marbles and as shiny as a diamond its tail is wagging as fast as a runner in a race. Instantly you fall in love. You do every thing together walk play dress up and much more. You two are closer then peas in a pod you have never been more happy or less bored. Finally all your begging has payed off!
The most amazing day
Time passed and you ask again and instead of your parents saying no as they usually though they say maybe. Then a bit later they call you over and.......there it is the dog you have been wanting for all this time! Its eyes are as big as marbles and as shiny as a diamond its tail is wagging as fast as a runner in a race. Instantly you fall in love. You do every thing together walk play dress up and much more. You two are closer then peas in a pod you have never been more happy or less bored. Finally all your begging has payed off!
AWESOME!!!!!!!
This blog was really happy and awesome just try to put commas in your writing peice.
ReplyDeleteIn the first paragraph in your writing, it says "over a hundred". I don't know if it is supposed to say "over a hundred times" but it is your writing piece.
ReplyDeleteI really like how you changed the colours of some of the words.
ReplyDeleteYou developed your ideas really well throughout this post. You used many adjectives and creative vocabulary.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Amber that you could use commas to seperate examples ... eg."...DROOL to much, SHED to much, or maybe even they will TARE the couch."